My New Debut Rp

(Music starts playing. I Come out with a Mic. in one hand and looks At the Crowd with A Grin On my Face And Makes way to the ring.)

Mr.Randy Orton: Okay Most of you do not know me. In fact none of you know me. Well my name is Randy Orton, Mr.Randy Orton to be exact. I Have been called The Legend Killer, The Viper, and The Apex Predator. Now I bet most of you are wondering why am I here ? I Am Here to Prove to Each and Everyone of you that I am A Future Champion.
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Mr.Randy Orton: Exit The Ring Then gets back in

Mr.Randy Orton:Oh yeah I Have One more thing to say I Do not Care about you booing me I Do not Care if you are my Fan I Could careless about any of you to tell you the Truth. All I came here to do is to Win the Title, To Destroy, who ever I Face, To get Money. So all I Have to tell you fans is Boo me all you want that is just going to make me Hurt my Opponent even More.

(Crowd: Boo!!! You Suck!!! Boo!!!)

Mr.Randy Orton: Be Quiet!! You Pathetic little cowards how dare you boo the person who is the Future of this Company. I Am the Future of this Company and Not no one is going to stop me.

Mr.Randy Orton: I Have One more thing to say I have No Remorse, I Have No Feelings, I Do not care about no body in this company except for myself. Like I said before I did not come here to make Fans I came here to do what I Want to do. Not what you Pathetic Cowards want me to do but what I Want to do and what I want to do is Wrestle to Destroy my opponents and I Promise you this I Will Make Everyone Suffer Whoever I Face. HAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!!!!!

( Throws the Mic. on The Ground then Leaves while Music Starts Playing )

Nice. Could have it so that you take a pause every like 2 sentences, but it's really good. Btw, you have a few unneeded commas :p

tiger mask wrote:Nice. Could have it so that you take a pause every like 2 sentences, but it's really good. Btw, you have a few unneeded commas :p

okay other then that Is that my best Rp or not

its good im not saying its Best but u need to seperate that Paragraph a little

icon sean wrote:its good im not saying its Best but u need to seperate that Paragraph a little

instead of one line skip do it 2 times for the Paragraph or just space our my Paragraph

more like Randy orton:something something

then again split some of it in half

Is that better

Not much

It should be longer and the part where u get out the ring then get back in shouldnt have ur name at the beginning

who said Bad

I dont believe anyone said it was bad

I voted for awful as a joke... is really C

I can make it look better when I put it in the show

Mr.Randy Orton:Thank you, Mr.Admin