WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!
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WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!
"The Bruiser" Vincenzo Fri Oct 22, 2010 1:55 pm
Donovan Jenkins makes his way to the ring
Donovan Jenkins: Wassup people! My names donovan jenkins,
and im new here in r&rw. Now, lets get to business. This is my
year, my time to shine and become the new Flying V Champion,
beat everyone in my way because this is my time for the glory and this
is
Sparks are showering
Vincenzo makes his way to the ring
Vincenzo : Woah woah, woah. What the hell do you think your
damn doing!
Coming in here, haven't had a single flipping match
in R&RW, saying, "Ohh, im going after the flying V title, because
this is my time".
Shut the hell up you stupid ass!
(Crowd laughs)
Vincenzo : I've worked here longer than you, and I haven't had a title shot...and its about time I did!
.............so, I think,
I'M GONNA KICK YOUR WINEY LITTLE APPLE PIE ASS!
Vincenzo jumps at his opponent
and performs a strong Bicycle Kick hitting Donovan Jenkins with two kicks!!
Vincenzo bounces off the top rope towars Donovan Jenkins
then catches the opponents head, swings around to fall backwards and drops Donovan Jenkins's head into the mat, connecting with a violent Springboard DDT!!
Vincenzo : YOU WANT TO BE A CHAMPION?!, ME...YOU... RIGHT NOW...
NUMBER ONE CONTENDERS MATCH!
(Donovan is slowly getting to his feet)
Vincenzo : IN A STEEL CAGE!!!!!!!!!!!
(Both stand tall and lock eyes in the center of the ring as the Steel Cage lowers)
(The Bell rings)
Last edited by "The Bruiser" Vincenzo on Sun Oct 31, 2010 4:03 pm; edited 10 times in total
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Re: WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!
"TgrMsk" Johnny Anderson Fri Oct 22, 2010 4:04 pm
a few format issues. first, space it out more, so that there is an entire blank line like this:
in between every action or dialogue phase. second, we needzta see the color.
also, where the hell did Zedo come from? it says Donovan at the beginning, then Zedo's magically in...
nothing against it, just some rookie rp'ing mistakes, you'll learn, believe me, my first few rp's were much worse than this... I wrote a few from a thrid person omniscient point of view when I started, so I would just kinda flat out say that the other person was scared, instead of just hinting at it, so yea...
in between every action or dialogue phase. second, we needzta see the color.
also, where the hell did Zedo come from? it says Donovan at the beginning, then Zedo's magically in...
nothing against it, just some rookie rp'ing mistakes, you'll learn, believe me, my first few rp's were much worse than this... I wrote a few from a thrid person omniscient point of view when I started, so I would just kinda flat out say that the other person was scared, instead of just hinting at it, so yea...
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Re: WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!
Jeff_Hardy1222 Fri Oct 22, 2010 5:06 pm
Lol I think he copy and pasted the moves from a match 
thus making "ZEDO" appear ^^
thus making "ZEDO" appear ^^
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WHO THE HELL ARE YOU?
Donovan Jenkins Fri Oct 22, 2010 8:00 pm
Donovan Jenkins:hahahahahahahahahaha hey Vincenzo go to hell u piece of crap(Donovan gets up and goes to attack Vincenzo and there both punching one at a time until both men are down on the ground as Donovan crawls and gets up)
Donovan Jenkins:I Will beat you face to face and i will face Zedo for the Flying V Championship and you aren't gunna do a damn thing about it(Donovan's Entrance Music plays and then he leaves ring and goes backstage)
Donovan Jenkins:I Will beat you face to face and i will face Zedo for the Flying V Championship and you aren't gunna do a damn thing about it(Donovan's Entrance Music plays and then he leaves ring and goes backstage)
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Re: WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!
Jeff_Hardy1222 Fri Oct 22, 2010 11:19 pm
Hmm..I think this fued will be tough since your both face ..And I think it should just end with both of you on the ground, as Zedo enters..and beats you both up ^^. But thats just what I think.
..And I think it should just end with both of you on the ground, as Zedo enters..and beats you both up ^^. But thats just what I think.
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Re: WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!
"The Bruiser" Vincenzo Sat Oct 23, 2010 4:36 am
ZEDO WAS A MISTAKE YOU IDIOTS!
and your rp sucked donovan so, yeah
and your rp sucked donovan so, yeah
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"TgrMsk" Johnny Anderson Sat Oct 23, 2010 7:44 am
Vinny, so does this one xD"The Bruiser" Vincenzo wrote:ZEDO WAS A MISTAKE YOU IDIOTS!
and your rp sucked donovan so, yeah
but seriously, just space it out more and you'll be fine
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Re: WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!
Jeff_Hardy1222 Sat Oct 23, 2010 3:11 pm
Okay, I know I'm not Jared..But I think we should all get along. We're in this fed to have fun (and occasionally make some FE). So I think you guys should remember...Its only an RP.
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"TgrMsk" Johnny Anderson Sat Oct 23, 2010 3:21 pm
I know, that's why I hate it when people go out of their way to make fun of someone just because they're not very good at rp'ing...Jeff_Hardy1222 wrote:Okay, I know I'm not Jared..But I think we should all get along. We're in this fed to have fun (and occasionally make some FE). So I think you guys should remember...Its only an RP.
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"The Bruiser" Vincenzo Sun Oct 31, 2010 3:39 pm
I would just like to say that the first speech by donovan was made by him so thats why its so u know what i mean
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Re: WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!
"The Bruiser" Vincenzo Sun Oct 31, 2010 3:43 pm
i didn't post "unfinished" at the end of that role play donovanDonovan Jenkins wrote:Donovan Jenkins:hahahahahahahahahaha hey Vincenzo go to hell u piece of crap(Donovan gets up and goes to attack Vincenzo and there both punching one at a time until both men are down on the ground as Donovan crawls and gets up)
Donovan Jenkins:I Will beat you face to face and i will face Zedo for the Flying V Championship and you aren't gunna do a damn thing about it(Donovan's Entrance Music plays and then he leaves ring and goes backstage)
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Re: WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!
"TgrMsk" Johnny Anderson Sun Oct 31, 2010 4:38 pm
what?? Where'd that come from?"The Bruiser" Vincenzo wrote:i didn't post "unfinished" at the end of that role play donovanDonovan Jenkins wrote:Donovan Jenkins:hahahahahahahahahaha hey Vincenzo go to hell u piece of crap(Donovan gets up and goes to attack Vincenzo and there both punching one at a time until both men are down on the ground as Donovan crawls and gets up)
Donovan Jenkins:I Will beat you face to face and i will face Zedo for the Flying V Championship and you aren't gunna do a damn thing about it(Donovan's Entrance Music plays and then he leaves ring and goes backstage)
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